Re: I thought this story would never come back to

[Defender_16]

Dude, that's not sappy, that's kick-ass. Too bad the site isn't up anymore, I wouldn't mind reading it.

[Id]

I move the story to: Id's story: "The Power"

So if you have any questions about it ask me here, I promise I will answer

[Defender_16]

Ok I have some questions! I finally started seriously looking at your story. (I'm sorry I've had lots to do.)

one more thing the story has a messed up time line, we start at the end, Act I, part 1, scene 1-Act I, part 1, scene 2, and then Russ is sent back in time, Act I, part 2, scene 1, and then restarts his journey, Act II, part 1, scene 3. So that’s the point of the information page

So the start of the actual writen stuff you have so far is in the past? and before that he came back from the future and is going to go back........Am I getting anywhere close here? (God that was a long sentence.)
EDIT: Nevermind I get it.

They are mostly woman and look like cat girls, Josifen has black fur around her eyes and covering her nose and has red irises,

What's the colour of the rest of her fur then, or is that it?

Next question: What the heck is a perficio human?

I need to re-read the entire thing again. I didn't read your stuff months before because I find I have to work to understand it.
I dont want to razz you about it again but punctuation can be a great thing. (Sorry)

Actually your punctuation and spelling is alot better in the middle posts then in the first one. A marked improvement!!! Way to go! ;D

[Id]

Ok, sorry I've not really been checking this thing.

They are mostly women and look like cat girls

No, not all girls are cat girls only a few races have cat-like qualities, the Fél-emberi(Hungarian for demi-human...I think) are cat-like but that's it, while the Hathatós(Hungarian for powerful) are the more...advanced virson of the Fél-emberi. In fact they are the same race only certain individuals become Hathatós when they show <meld>, or magic if you will, skill; then...actually if I tell you I would give away too much plot, so you'll just haft to wait, sorry...

What's the colour of the rest of her fur then, or is that it?

OK thats simple, mostly it is orangeish-rusty brown color execpt for around the eyes.

Next question: What the heck is a perficio HUMANUS?

Perficio humanus is supost to be Latin, or Hungarian, not sure, for perfict humanus, in this case he has been genetically modified to become almost immortal; fast healing, "auto-start" heart beat, increased abilities... you know, that kind of stuff.

Actually your punctuation and spelling is a lot better in the middle posts then in the first one. A marked improvement!!! Way to go! ;D

Thanks.

[Defender_16]

They are mostly woman and look like cat girls, Josifen has black fur around her eyes and covering her nose and has red irises,

I was specifically referring to the race that Josifen was part of, not everyone in the world. ;D

Next!

Hungarian not sure, for perfict humanus, in this case

Sooo you meant 'perfect human' right?

genticly modifyied to become almost immortal; fast healing, "auto-start" heart beat, increased abiltys...

Actually there's a problem with the 'auto start' heart beat system. While The heart does have some of it's own automatic function, it is regulated by impulses from the brain. The main problem when somone dies is that the brain stops, which makes the heart stop as well.

If the person's neck is snapped an auto start heart beat system will keep blood flowing to the brain, keeping it alive. The rest of the body below the break will not be able to recieve nerve impulses from the brain telling it what to do.

A genetically modified individual could possibly have the ability to regenerate nerve fibers and repair the broken neck. These things take time though. Even on 'Highlander' when an Immortal is 'shot to death' for instance, it takes time for them to revive.

An option that I came up with from reading The New Jedi Order Novels was the possibility of 'Backup nerve strands'. This still wouldn't help with the bone damage from a broken neck, but hey I can't think up everything.

Hope this helps a little.

[Id]

I was specifically referring to the race that Josifen was part of, not everyone in the world.

Oh...no there are not others, but Josifen and other Hathatós have the abilty to travel through space, and diminsions, so the other side of it is yes, there are cat-girls in other worlds.

Sooo you meant 'perfect human' right?

OK fine I'll give a bit of the plot away...actualy this kinda helps...the guard(to be refered to as he) is in an organism calling themselves the perficio humanus, they have enforces on every plant to make sure that none of the total world peace treaty has or will be broken.

Blah blah blah...read the last two paragraps

I see where you are confused, I was short on time, but here is the basic rundown: they do not stay dead, not even a god-like being could easily kill them and keep them dead; they have the abilty to regrow limbs, mend bones, and restore blood and neurological pathways. Also their bodies do not age, so there are many who are trillions of years old.

Also, yes, it does take time for them to heal, approximatly one to two days for major injuries and a week to a year to regrow a new body depending on how much of the body was left.

...I hope this answers your questions.

[Id]

Oh yeah, I forgot to thank you for being the first person to really ask me questions...


Oh and a piece of news, I got a deiviant account and will put "The Power" there.

Here is the URL:

the-fate-control.deviantart.com/